would you say these lyrics ae great, good, ok, bad, or other?
i wrote these about a minute ago. its gettin pretty hot this month, so my thoughts are heated. certain people started talkin, i could not believe it. what made them wanna show up all of a sudden? they say it's out of love, but it probably wasnt. i've been in situations when anger isnt even called for. i aint new to all the drama, i'm a sophmore. if you're new to my mind, then here's the long tour, but i'm not gonna guarantee any of you guys a part 4. just take it and leave it like it is. no need for arguing and saying some spiteful things, cuz you dont have too much proof in that little mind of yours, which is a sorry excuse of a family, call it your wife and kids. me and my mind, i tend to think aloud, but its better inside. that way it can process without any interruptions, people askin different questions and pushin on different buttons. i can make my presence felt without any introduction, invited them up, but truth is i love to see em duckin. u say you know whats on my mind, you hardly have ties. and i see those certain standards you hardly apply. things money could buy, could never add up to the things only love can supply. u have feelings when u live, they hardly alive, i have enough hate, im hardly deprived. the question is, are these lyrics great, good, ok, bad, or other and do i have potential? thank you in advance. p.s. this is a rap so grammar really doesnt matter to me.
Rap and Hip-Hop - 4 Answers
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1 :
Ok 6.75/10 You have potental but this sounds like you listen to drake. Excuse that comment if you dont. But if you wanna be really good listen to Old School & Underground Nas 2Pac A Tribe Called Quest Jedi Mind Tricks Krs One Some to get you started
2 :
very good
3 :
You need a title for it and rap can't be just based on lyrics, it also depends on how you deliver the rap. Maybe next time, you should make a video of you rapping that song. But all in all, the lyric was good.
4 :
Thats like me when I was in 8th grade, basic ryhme scheme, very simple vocab, choppy flow at best, and no real punchlines, metaphors, or mind blowing lyrics.
